kushina obito lemon fanfiction

you got the timeline messed up. one kakashi and Rin and Obito and asuma should be in the same class. Two kushina abduction happens in the second great ninja war. Minato participated in the war. and kushina and Minato are classmates

At cepter 52,Kushina delivery date known by Obito but not Minto and MC, they were busy outside the village so Obito took the opportunity and attacked the village,killed kuthina and kidnapped Naruto. MC knows the story before hand even minato knows did about obito and that he was hunting the Beats. but still they outside playing.

The translation is kinda ass ike everyone has hyuga eyes like damn when did kakashi become a hyuga and how is kushina still a child with kakshi and obito around and where the hell is minato

The idea is very interesting but needs to be more developped. I have suggested somes ideas like flashbacks or other in a post. To show the way that this is not developped enough, at the beginning, the moment he see his friends is not developped, I would have developed this moment more than just a sentence from an external point of view with a dialogue or a hug maybe (because Obito is happy to see his sensei and the one he love and he saw dying alive). An other moment is that Obito, before the Kanabi bridge mission said to Kushina that the mission would be a success and no one would be injured and I would like to see the return and Obito saying to Kushina "I told it to you". But there is an improvement in writing and it's nice ^^. And the idea that Fugaku want a future without war for his children is so good!

The characters in this fic are so funny, the konoha f4 here are super funny and this fic has the best handling of Obito in fanfiction this Obito is really likeable and a funny chad. This is one of the best naruto fanfics.