broomstick fanfic
First time writing anything, I hope you all would enjoy this. *** I don't know how it happened or why, but this is my new reality—a world of magic and fiction. Now living in the world of *Versatile Mage*, where powerful emperors and dark organizations like the Black Vatican cause trouble, Damon must find a way to survive in this strange new place. As the overpowered character he created himself, he has to navigate this dangerous world and use his powers to face the challenges ahead. *** Pure Versatile Mage Fanfic, I am really reading the work as I write this to be more accurate with the story so yeah there can be a some mistakes especially given how large this novel is, so yeah please do inform me if I make any mistakes. *Harem: not Mu Ningxue Or Ye Yixin *Anti hero *Overpowered *System
The fanfic is interesting, but it's too fast. The way G learns magic is somehow too easy and quick. Why make Dumbledore evil? Author, I recommend reading the fanfic Hogwarts: Grind is My Wizard Path. It's realistic and explains how, for example, Herbology is important for potions. How important talent is, how difficult it is to achieve, and how important knowledge of the little things is, which is not found in books where experience is needed. It's like learning to fly a broomstick: only through personal experience can you learn, etc. ... And the worst thing is that Dumbledore is evil? Does everyone have a disease for the headmaster of Hogwarts? I've found so few fanfics where Dumbledore is kind. Do you think people are complete fools? They won't understand this in the magical world. Because of this, I can't immerse myself in the fanfic. When you read, you can't immerse yourself in the story. It's ordinary and boring. You get lost in the immersion itself. I hope you can make the same story by rewriting it, redoing it, and there's no need to make it evil, please)))