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FartArtPupilLv27yr
2017-10-21 06:30

30 chapters - DROPPED I registered only to write this review, why! Cuz I'm mad for wasting time reading 30 chapters, The story is one of the best, good ideas, low, yet acceptable world-building; but the plot, logic, motive, character development, are all crap! Please forgive my offense but the author could have given us a beautiful fantastic work but he hurriedly pulls crap from God knows where and magically the 14 years boy becomes a badass in a few days, yet it could be acceptable to 10 years olds if he at least provided a justification, then a series of "matter of fact"s are thrown all over the place, add more "beauties" " save the father" and "run from the enemy" well, the young guy now is an expert after a few days_ and here you are, a very immature stupidly mustered plot with no motives, no details, no development. This is a light novel, I'm not expecting something by Dostyvasky, nevertheless; the author needs to be aware of a very minor little detail called "LOGIC" I refrained from mentioning details for spoilers, and I gladly wholeheartedly kiss goodbye for this lovely amazing work. DROPPED.

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Thanks for giving it a try and i'm sorry that you're disappointed about the novel, I hope you could find other novels you like on the site. :D

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Appreciate your kind replay and your open attitude for feedback, I hold nothing but respect for any translator, my words were solely directed to the author, and with great anticipation awaiting your next project.

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Based on chapters 1-244,I would start off with the story general plotline being similar to WMW or Warlock of the Magus world if you have read that. Many reviews would comment on that and some agree that it is very similar. I just want to highlight that the reviewers have said that this came first so from that it is assume that WMW have potentially copied the aspects from this novel rather than this novel copying WMW. However, because this novel have less translated chapters than WMW and WMW being in a more prominent position in reputation, people assume that this novel is just a copycat. I just want to mention this point because alot of the new viewers need to know that the novel is not a copycat and WMW is not a copycat either because nothing in the world is truly original. Many work done by people have aspects from other activities. This novel compared to the WMW is just like Harry potter and Lord of the rings, both have magic and villans that is super overpowered. I know the comparison is not one to one while WMW with this novel is super similar, but the MC do things quite differently, for me WMW MC is more cold and machine like while the MC here is more human like but less clever. *Minor spoiler, WMW MC is colder for me because he don't really appreciates his family while this MC does so that speaks alot of words.* But sometimes I question the decision made by this MC more as he makes more mistakes which could be good as it shows his human side. For me, this novel and WMW is similar to Power Rangers from my childhood,Power ranger always follows the same principle, have the rangers and the villains fighting one another and the rangers winning fight at the end of the day but people still watch that because the side story and how the rangers achieve their powers is what attracts viewers so the path taken by MC is similar but what they did and how they achieve it is different. Overall the storyline is turning out great as each motive is back-up and their is good progress, world background have potential for having ancient times and modern age incorporated as well as having multiple continents to explore, Character is on par with WMW, maybe better on the personality side but lacking in history of the character (have to wait), the updating stability and translation quality is 3 stars for me as it is not overly fast like other novel at 20 but it is still good enough already and there is a few grammar mistakes(such as not knowing who the MC is addressing his message to and etc) that affect the story a little bit but generally understandable and the experience is not affected. This novel is rated above average in my library and it is really good to read it thinking that it is like another path that the MC with computer chip in his soul can take. Although the future development is unknown for me as I have not read the raw but I guess that it will be as great as WMW is. Good work Translator, a baby step now, a general in the future! Ps. This is my first review ever so I may not write a very good and accurate review but I hope it helps to attract you to read this novel without too much spoiler. English is my second language so sorry for any inconvenience! :)

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Zefelina
ZefelinaLv5

Review as of ch 42: I don't know if it's the novel or the translation (though I suspect it's the novel itself) but so far I dislike the main character and all the supporting ones. Nothing is clearly explained, story jumps around from chapter to chapter without clearly explaining whys or hows. The story itself is similar to Warlock in the magus world, but the writing style and immersion quality are totally different (I heard that Warlock was written after this novel but its hard to believe). The main character gets stronger basically by eating stuff that everyone else also eats but his body is somehow different. About side characters: basically girls follow him for the benefits and offer themselves to him whenever they need smth from him but the main character always holds himself back even if he secretly likes them. Aside from the girls there is the father (I totally don't get their relationship - in the beginning he's disappointed in his son, later when the son somehow gets as strong as him nothing is questioned). It feels like side characters are only there to give reasons as to why the main char is moral, strong, loves family, etc. There are so many inconsistancies it's not even funny. In one chapter the assessment for school is in a month, in another half a year already passed and the main char charges other students tuotion fees that are 5 times more than the primary teacher fees, everyone is useless in combat and the only teacher that can teach smth useful (languages) is the only one who has connections with wizards that he himself doesn't know about. And somehow that teacher has a daughter who I suspect willalso try to spread her legs for the protagonist only for him to refuse to do anything.

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