Honest Review
The story feels rushed overall, and it often skips over crucial details that would make the scenes more engaging. For example, the author introduces elements like flames or swords but doesn’t describe them in any meaningful way. It’s not enough to just say, flames appeared or a sword appeared at his waist. Take the time to paint a picture for the reader. For instance, are the flames roaring with heat, flickering in shades of crimson and gold, or casting shadows that dance across the battlefield? Is the sword sleek and polished, with intricate carvings along its hilt, or does it have a rugged, battle-worn appearance that tells a story of countless battles? These small details create immersion.
The same issue applies to the fights—they’re too short and lack proper buildup or choreography. Action sequences need to feel dynamic, with clear descriptions of movements and the emotional intensity of the moment. Instead, the fights often come across as abrupt and underwhelming. And the dialogue during these scenes? It’s repetitive and drags the pace down. A good fight should seamlessly blend action and dialogue, with each enhancing the other, rather than interrupting the flow.
Overall, the story could be much more compelling with better pacing, richer descriptions, and more thoughtful integration of action and dialogue. Right now, it feels like a first draft with a lot of untapped potential.
