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2024-11-27 17:05

The story itself is interesting, and I like how the plot is progressing. The frequent updates are definitely a plus and keep the momentum going. However, the writing really needs a lot of improvement. The grammar, sentence structure, and flow make it difficult to fully enjoy the story.

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Aleksic
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Indeed! The grammer and the flow is horrible otherwise a great story! Sigh…

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