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DaoistaZrLCa
DaoistaZrLCaLv26mth
2024-11-12 21:07

Tras la lectura de los primeros catorce capítulos, puedo afirmar que la historia peca de ser excesivamente genérica. Si bien los elementos comunes no son necesariamente negativos y, en muchos casos, pueden funcionar bien, en esta obra no lograrán alcanzar el impacto deseado. La construcción del protagonista y de los personajes secundarios carece de profundidad y se siente predecible, lo cual limita la originalidad del relato. Dado que se trata de un fanfic, es comprensible que pueda experimentar cambios y ajustes en el proceso; Sin embargo, recomendaría al autor invertir un mayor esfuerzo en el desarrollo de los personajes y la trama. Quizás una exploración más detallada de obras originales, como ciertos cómics o adaptaciones cinematográficas, podría proporcionar inspiración para enriquecer las personalidades y motivaciones de los personajes. A pesar de estas limitaciones, cabe destacar algunos aspectos positivos. Los diálogos y las interacciones, aunque no son sobresalientes, resultan bastante superiores en comparación con el promedio que suelen encontrarse en este sitio (aproximadamente un 75% de otras historias). Además, los capítulos tienen una extensión generosa, lo cual permite al lector sumergirse en la narrativa y disfrutar de una experiencia más prolongada. En resumen, esta historia posee potencial, pero requiere un mayor esfuerzo creativo para superar la barrera de lo genérico y ofrecer una experiencia más envolvente y memorable.

DC: I'm The Ultimate Lifeform

itachi1010
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44 Chs

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MoneyMonarch
MoneyMonarchLv10

Eu sou provavelmente a única pessoa que leu isso completamente, e so por que eu tenho tik.

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GloryForAll
GloryForAllLv14

Gave me a headache trying to read. The story was just an incoherent mess with a large dose of cringe scattered throughout.

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Abdul_Rahman_5112
Abdul_Rahman_5112Lv4

Thought you meant kars, had me so excited 😪😪😪

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TyrantTron335
TyrantTron335Lv13

This Broly i really like about it, he has the mentality of DBZ Broly & Power of DBS Broly

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Lizrock
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R3vfor
R3vforLv4

you are not him bro. don't try to write deep introspective character

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Raptor2244
Raptor2244Lv14

All the characters are very one dimensional except the Mc who has slightly more character and the Mc is arrogant and extremely edgy. I don't know how to describe it other than that but it was a real struggle to read all of the chapters up to the current one. I feel like this was something I would have enjoyed when I was a a young teenager, but now the Mc just seems like an emotionally unstable person that doesn't understand himself and is just basing all his actions on 'would a free person to this' for literally every decision more important than going to the bathroom. It's to the point where the freedom he seeks has become the chains that bind him down. It's frustrating to read about someone so confused about who they are and what they want while also having the mentality of a young teenager.

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Holy_Gull_1843
Holy_Gull_1843Lv1

its a bad fic-------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

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LastGod
LastGodLv5

this has alot going for it. the problem as with ALOT of OP characters. Is that relationships make a character interesting when they have op powers. because almost every battle is a win they have to have a slice of life like story. so love funny time interesting goals. Freedom has been tried as a goal and it has never worked. in my opinion freedom is not the escape from responsibility or emotions. it the power to never have to worry about what other people do or think unless you want to or respect and or love them.

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Jploui93
Jploui93Lv4

betting 30 chapters and then drop like the rest, then rinse and repeat with whatever bs story is next.

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