I liked the idea of this story but the grammar makes it quite difficult to read and i just get confused at certain times, one of the annoying parts was how stupid the main character is especially when he reveals all of his secrets. Supposedly it’s because he was extremely tired but honestly that’s not a good enough excuse for someone to spout all of their secrets
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LIKE12 hours of nonstop byakugan move…he is tired plus he know he is the last Hyuga, why take the Hyuga clan's secret to the grave,also the info he reveal was the fact that he was part of the main clan, he is an heir, and that if people are related they have similar chakra, also grammar not that bad, its readable, its fine, any more complaint
can you use grammarly to improve the sentences i just feel like reading but not at the same time