I feel this is genarated by AI with the spacing like “confrontation with Sirius black” It just does not feel natural transition to what is about to happen. Also the one paragraph about each character and how they raised Harry. It just feels a tell not show. Then there is the bolding of all the speech which gets annoying, like cant you use quotation marks and then use bolding for spells? Also for the confrontation with Sirius apparently Dante never told Harry that he was his uncle and that his mothers name was lily, like at all. Then in chapter 3 it says “since Sirius arrived at devil may cry a year ago.” Like what Sirius can now travel dimensions?

the beginning was not bad, you could tell there was AI but it wasn't that bad. However, I feel like it got worse in the Daphne chs. ait might have been the same but I took a break and came back, and it felt worse.

This is really interesting and fun, but the bolds on the words take away from the experience. Your eye keeps jumping from one bold to another while kinda omitting everything in between. That is about the only issue I have otherwise this is great!

La premisa de la historia es muy buena, su ejecución magistral hay potencial de muy buenas tramas en esta historia, uno de los problemas que tenía con las historia de solucionó con la reescritura así que, me gusta bastante.

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