Hey can u check out what I’ve done so far. I just started out. The novel is called The Cruel Horizon. Also let me know what I can work on. Thank you so much🙏🏽

I just read the first paragraph of the summary. So far, there is only one mistake. and that is treating your readers as if they already know the plot/the world. specifically when you are talking about the weight of humanity he carries, as you mention it to be a curse. Whether it is one or not doesn't matter. The way you are portraying stuff is what makes it look like that, so you should try to work around it and be less mysterious. I'm not saying you should just spoil the whole plot of the novel, but just starting with a tidy and neat summary is what drives readers into your novel. Imo, try to rewrite the summary, and be conscious that readers have 0 knowledge about anything, even if they do. even if your novel is based on mysteries and discovering stuff, being clear from the start can help you have an easier time down he road while writing your novel. try to have a Google Docs, a Word, or Excel/Google sheets to keep up with everything you are writing about the novel so as to try not to create any plotholes in the novel. that's my 2 main pieces of advice for you.

Oh my gosh, thank you so much! I'll fix that right away. When you have time, could you also check out the first couple of chapters? I'm slowly building things up and giving the characters a chance to develop. Let me know if it's good or not.

I'll, however I have another advice if you may be careful when building up things or "foreshadowing," it can be counterproductive to do it most times, and it's not needed. foreshadowing also has to be mainly hidden and not hinted that there is something there, like in one piece at the beginning when Shanks uses conquerors haki to scare the fish away and save luffy. for someone who doesn't know a thing about one piece and is just starting to watch it (or for the ones that watched/read it when it was coming out), they only think that he scared the fish away with a strange look, but then, ~400 chapters later (I think) we come to know what haki is and we latter know that hanks used conquerors haki there. it wasn't hinted or anything, and it was downplayed and hidden instead. so try and do that too if you want to use foreshadowing (which I don't recommend to do too much, as this is your first novel i think)

Got It Got It. Thank you so much🙏🏽. Also new chapters were added. 😬

So is this a good read?

Did you delete your book?

Yea..took a break for a minute due to mental health. But....it will come back

So it's been 2 months so you should have read it... so is it good?

😭😭😭 no Lmaoo I didn’t read it coz no one ever replied to me hahaha

Oh lol