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erebuss
erebussLv145mth
2024-10-20 18:45

Like I said in the comments the story is really well written but man I just hate the kind of main character you produced. At first I thought his arrogance and narcissistic scene in the beginning was just humor and him joking. But no that’s his character he’s arrogant, a narcissist and is always on a power trip. I can’t really say he’s intelligent because he hasn’t done anything intelligent except for the headmistress chapter. I also feels like he relies too much on the system, I feel like adding him being able to buy breakthrough was kind of dumb(btw I love op mcs) and it feels like he will never achieve anything on his own. That’s it like I said the story is really good but imo the mc is a 1 star character.

I AM A MAGE BUT WITH MILF SYSTEM

author_210
4.4
388 Chs

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author_210Author

Yeah, like i replied to you i havent reached the point where he gets his character development, btw thanks for reading and review.

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Pv4t
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I really like the mc and the fact relies a lot on the system but it depends from person to person, btw i cant vote =(( or give gift fix so i can support you work <3

author_210:Yeah, like i replied to you i havent reached the point where he gets his character development, btw thanks for reading and review.
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author_210Author

thanks for reading, yeah my book has not been vetted yet , you can vote after vetting

Pv4t:I really like the mc and the fact relies a lot on the system but it depends from person to person, btw i cant vote =(( or give gift fix so i can support you work <3
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htaed009
htaed009Lv3

i do wonder if that character development will tone down his arrogance. i have no problem with a mc that has a huge ego bcs of power he got from his own hard work, but people who basically get power from systems have the most ego for no reason. Lets take an example, people like Gojo despite him having a huge ego, and thats bcs he didn't cheat getting his power. but if u give a loser a system and he suddenly gets overpowered without any work and then gets super egotistical then thats a trash character, just sayin 🤷‍♂️

author_210:Yeah, like i replied to you i havent reached the point where he gets his character development, btw thanks for reading and review.
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author_210Author

Yes, the mc does not have that arrogance; he has confidence and is manipulative but isn't overly egotistical or arrogant.

htaed009:i do wonder if that character development will tone down his arrogance. i have no problem with a mc that has a huge ego bcs of power he got from his own hard work, but people who basically get power from systems have the most ego for no reason. Lets take an example, people like Gojo despite him having a huge ego, and thats bcs he didn't cheat getting his power. but if u give a loser a system and he suddenly gets overpowered without any work and then gets super egotistical then thats a trash character, just sayin 🤷‍♂️
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I like big butts and I cannot lie

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AUTHOR HERE: So I was bored during my vacation reading smuts here in webnovel and I had an idea of making one smut myself. So i made this novel as the result of my boredom. It does not contain any NTR, sharing, cuck or any things like that. I tried making it a mixture of both smut and magic development. So i hope you enjoy reading

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Warning: a scum and a rapist MC. Should have an evil tag in this novel. Can’t believe another good potential novel just to be ruined by MC’s character. Author loser character is mixing with his novel. Sigh ……

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One of my favorites now. Read the author's notes/warnings, accept it and enjoy the story. Good writing after you get through the first few chapters. They are not bad by any means but, like most novels, need build up. MC's personality is clear and consistent right from the start: domineering and single-minded in his goals. He will do somewhat unspeakable things. But the author made that clear from the start. The sex/smut scenes are, in my opinion, divine and yes you can call me a degenerate. But they really are exciting to read. Plot is intriguing enough. World building is sufficient. Not a lot has been revealed and that just keeps you wanting more. Gonna be parking my stones and GTs here for a good while.

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