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LasnoshaLv153mth
2024-10-25 14:20

The story was initially interesting, but it literally goes in a circle for at least 10-15 chapters with no real development. Then it skips weeks to months ahead with no background. There is no crucial plot just a story that continues to circle around and around. I wasted coins on this story.

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Adewole_TinuadeAuthor

Thank you so much for reading my book!! I highly appreciate your sincere comment . I’d like to highlight that it’s my first book on webnovel and it’s a creative work in progress. They say practice makes perfect, if you stick on the book till the end, I assure you that you won’t be disappointed . Thank you🫰🏽☺️

Adewole_TinuadeAuthor

Plus if you read my story outline , there’s a plot and I’m building on that. Also , I’d love to humbly deny the allegation about going from weeks to months. I never specified anywhere in my book on that , not to say that your feelings aren’t valid but I just wanted to clarify that. There was no place I mentioned weeks or months. Thank you so much 🥰🥰💞

LasnoshaLv15

The FL literally states that she s been trying weeks to months to get the ML to open up, but he keeps pushing her away. This push and pull goes on for 10-15 chapters. We didnt even get the background when Liam came back and all of sudden wanted to be a father. Your story skips a lot and based on your last response. i wonder if you even read it yourself since you say it doesnt say that when it does. You can see from my comment that i have read all 41 chapters.

Adewole_TinuadeAuthor

Thank you for your review🥰 I sincerely understand where you’re coming from because I wrote the book I believe you’re talking about chapter 10 where she mentioned this: “I know in my heart that I agreed to this arrangement because I sincerely thought it would be easy—pretend to be Michael's fiancée for a few months, collect my reward, and move on with my life. But now, as the weight of the situation settles over me, I realize just how deep I am in”. I think you read that part wrong, and what Isabella was doing there was a speculation. She was literally thinking out loud and it didn’t mean that it was months already. Sorry for the misconception. Asides this , I’m so excited to be talking with a fan over my book🥰🥰 Thank you^^💞💞

Adewole_TinuadeAuthor

And about chapter 15, where she said “I had spent weeks, maybe months”, Isabella was exaggerating there which was the point of that area so I understand your misconception there and I’ve edited it. Thank you for your honest reviews and I hope to see more of this on my subsequent chapters and my future books🥰🥰❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️

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