I Became Rimuru In Kuroinu: Fixing A Hentai World Book Review By Bilal_Arshad - WebNovel

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2024-10-16 14:56

The premise of the story is good: A guy with rimuru's powers and a good sense of justice in the Kuroinu world. But there are many problems: 1. The MC is too shounen MC with dark backstory like, not a real person. 2. The MC's dialogue is very cringe 3. Monsters believe in him without a show of force or any achievements and follow him to attack people they shouldn't even know about 4. The author is too against only men, I want MC to kill a few women as well 5. The author just tries to make MC an exact copy of Rimuru that he forces some plot points to get the powers 6. Great Sage started of as too sentient and became too much like Manas: Ciel 7. I don't think the author knows properly how some skills work

I Became Rimuru In Kuroinu: Fixing A Hentai world

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The_Ninja_king9138Author

finally and Actual review and not someone just being mean too me, anyway yeah I am too agent's men but doesn't mean that the MC ow just giving to give People like Olga a slap in the hands for all there troubles, for why have you seen the shit the male's in that Story does piece's of shit, for the whole great sage thing I don't know how to Write Great Sage so I write what I know about Ciel, as for the Monster I think i explained in the latest ch, or maybe it is in one my drafts, it is because of the skill Mind set transfer, just wanna say the backstory of the MC is not fully explored and yes he may look edgy but i am not going for that, thank you for the actual Review which i can use to Improve and not another hate review

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NaigeltonLv2

its cringe... it just a copy paste of rimurus story but into the kuroinu world.. the mc sounds like ash from pokemon mc is always overly optemistic and author always re uses sentences over and over but just with minor difference ... plot holes everywhere and shit that dont make sense happends but yeah .. i vould not recomend this one to a freind ..

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GarlandLv4

The Main Issue of the story comes from how it just copies Rimuru's journey with the whole being in a cave, meeting a dragon, a wolf and then even starting with Goblins. It would have been fine if he was still a slime and had all his starting abilities but it just feels like he tries everything to be like Rimuru which overall just dimishes his character. Even the whole nation building isn't really delved into as anything related to it is just placed to the side. All we see are results and never the process. The handling of the cast from Kuroinu also felt very weak in terms of relationship between nations. They all just easily accepted everything. Sure their were some skepticism but it felt just too quick especially with how things are. This is why it would have been better off if the MC started with Orcs instead of just copying Rimuru with the Goblins. At least with them it would have created further proved to Princess Knights how different they are compared to Olga's forces. Overall, the MC is just a Copy of Rimuru down to his starting monster comrades, the nation building is just non existent and the handling of the other characters were pretty bland. It's not bad but it also not good, just average.

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VictorElderbloodLv12

it's an interesting story so far so keep up the amazing work

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axel_GarciaLv4

this is pretty good a spelling error here and there still good! also folks for some reason chapter 9 and 8 are swapped so read 9 first

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Thor_Ragnarok_8653Lv1

Great story so far I hope Kaguya is in the harem

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