So the MC dies after seeing his GF out with another man. he then proceeds to get OP but remains loyal even when a vampire lady offers herself quoting he has someone to get back to. this tanked the character design for me because he owed that gf nothing. there wasn't enough relationship buildup for me to care, no trials they overcame other than he was lonely. the loyalty he gives her is not warranted. everything else would make this a great story. slight grammar issues but nothing you won't find in other novels.
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LIKEand kiss him, plus they went somewhere if she didn't see the MC, like the NTR plots
A_Sleepless_dream:Thanks I’ll not read this then if this is what keeps the plot going… I would be hating in every chapter if I had to read thru it and find out for myself… imagine her getting together with every guy from a magic fam lmao… just cause her family said so lolimage