Item: Multiverse : Blind Box system
Rating: 3.2
Author: Korkyros

KorkyrosLv16mth

2024-10-10 00:49

Great premise but you have a few things you need to work on and go back through your previous chapters. Firstly your gimmick the blind box was supposed to be daily? but it isn't incorporated well into your story. The plot around the vole is kind of haphazard and doesn't really read well. The Alternate Universe of adding the magic phone makes the world feel like its in modern time but falls flat on the Harry Potter plot due to it being out of its time. Frequently in the story it reads like rough draft for your story. I would recommend and editor of some kind.

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