I see so its a wiki of what? I guess I will try to google it. When I googled SCP by itself it brought me to a bunch of random things that were unrelated to fiction. My first point still stands btw. IF you do not know what SCP is you are just thrown into the deep end. I kind of likened it in my mind to X-Files or a Law and Order set up, maybe even creepy pasta. Also there is no SCP tag so going in I simply thought it was a cross-over multiversal story. The only mention of SCP in your summary is at the end and only briefly. I found your story going to the Fanfiction then most recent and figured I would give it a try. I wasn't trying to complain either. I was simply giving criticism letting you know a flaw in your style. I agree with your point about you should be allowed to assume its a fanfic of this so you don't have to explain but you have a tag for FGO and FGO is in your title so I thought that, that was going to be the main world thus i assumed it was a fanfic of FGO not some SCP. I know what waifu catalog is as it is rather prevalent here on webnovel but before encountering it a few times I had no idea what it was outside of my assumption due to the words being pretty good descriptors.

Entering the story if you do not know SCP (like myself) you have no understanding what is going on. There is no real explanation of what is going on just horrific event after horrific event. No explanation of characters appearance outside of their fingernails. Knowing that SCP - and having no previous understanding or where to find the source - is the majority of this story as of current, I find the story lacking as a fanfiction. I know recently a new arc for FGO has begun but the question stands do i need to read the previous arc to read the new one? If not then why is it a continuation of the story? If yes then I would say it was executed poorly for anyone who doesn't have canon knowledge.

Had me reading it with intrigue till chapter 9 which is left field weird kinda like M.Night. Shamalan films. Hick ups in translation or the author doesnt know how language works. The story actually has a great pacing in my opinion. They rely on character design and world background of the original work until chapter 9. At the moment I am not sure this is transformitive enough to legally be called a fanfiction.

It's supposed to be Erised which is Desire backwards.

What does this mean?

Im gonna read his name as Taki from now on.

The romance written for the harem is absolutely horrid. Dude has been imprisoned for a long time and yet he loves them and they believe it. Hormones I get. Love at first sight even but that they believe his words is bs.

the he is in reference to someone else or himself? If it is in reference to himself the "he's" should be "I'm"

I will give it another try. Maybe after getting some sleep. Like I said though, apart from the style I didn't have much of an issue with the story with the exception of that one remark about the chakra and the time skip. Which I could argue with myself to say is negligible since you could always explain that later. The two best first person points of view (which is what you were using but in my opinion a poor style) are in the perspective of a nostalgic MC telling the story similar to How I Met Your Mother or written like the MC is writing a letter to someone or a writing in their Diary.

Wasn't it 500,000? thats Five Hundred Thousand it needs another zero for five million.

Im not a fan of the style of story telling. It is told as if whoever's point of view it is in is speaking to the reader and is immersion breaking. I wouldn't mind if it was every now and then but the whole story up to the 4th chapter (where I quit reading) is written like the MC is perpetually breaking the fourth wall. No description of the MC and the World Background is already existent so they just chose a timeline. English is written well so if it is a translation, it is done amazingly. I feel like instead of forgoing the reincarnator's perspective on chakra that it could have filled up the 6 month time skip spot where the previous chapter was really short.

This is an average joe? maybe before the 90's? Even that is arguable due to hippy era. So maybe before the 70s?

While a good story, is the person who reincarnated as Naruto also rather young? They seem to have a child like thought process.

A lot of spacing issues in this chapter

You could make the Ancient One busy with another invasion. Maybe something similar to like in the MCU when Loki invades Earth. Or if it doesn't harm the later half of the story too much -since this is an au-, the Ancient One could be in the fight where she dies.

Honestly I prefer your translation and edits to the original mtl I was reading of this. Though a Question. Once you make so many changes from the original where it makes it difficult to coincide with the mtl will you shift it into your own personal story or do some sort of short plot to make it work like a inverse retcon?

WOAH we actually get to see the system or cheat for the first time!

He hated dragons so much he attempted multiple wars of genocide. (I have read a lot of fanfiction and that may be from a fanfiction but I seem to remember the scene actually mentioned or reffered to in the anime.)

I found this chapter jarring with the just being rude the the girl for no reason. If his parents hear this it would bite him in the butt for being a bully if we ignore that he can rewind time. I say this because they know he has no issues with females.

I am just going to imagine that says Lucas but I dont even know how to translate the last name.