It’s a good, wry good idea of a story. There’s a huge plot hole in the first chapter to the 3rd chapter. She wakes up and doesn’t understand why she’s in a new body(female snap) only to contradict that by saying she planned it all out with the ‘company’. She then goes for a 4th magic system when she already has 3 to use. She has Roy mustang’s template, also another persons who I don’t know(somthing to do with metals), and Harry Potter magic(snaps template) she then goes for a magic girl magic system. She also planes to steal from the ‘company’ by getting a new character template each week and putting all the memories in a metal(metal magic thing) this is such a broken thing that it would probably ruin the story but thankfull the ‘company’ read her mind and said no and there would be consequences if she does this, and so they compensate her with the full power of the magic girl magic system right off the bat. This just completely ruins that aspect as well, why go for another magic system in the first place then. I also asked if the aurther could explain this ‘company’ so we can understand what it can or can’t do. I would also suggest to breaking the really long paragraph up, it takes up my full screen and I have to scroll a bit to get to the end of the paragraph. Other than that, it is aurthers first book so its pretty good.
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LIKEThe company is from the waifu catalogue. They are interdimensional slavers when a character is captured they make a limited number of copys of them and sell them. They hire contractors (normaly people from our world) to actually stamp(enslave)the original character. To help the contractors the company gives them points to buy perks, lures(mind control or sex/romance/people skills) characters(those copy’s from earlier), templates and defenses the amount of points they receive is dependent on how powerful the world the contractor goes to. Also the contractor gets points for capturing characters and also from selling them.
I don’t know why the aurther could not explain that then, I was confused about the company. But even then there is a plot hole in the beginning that said she didn’t know how she got them then the next chapter she planed to be in that body with the company’s help.
This_Humble_Dragon:The company is from the waifu catalogue. They are interdimensional slavers when a character is captured they make a limited number of copys of them and sell them. They hire contractors (normaly people from our world) to actually stamp(enslave)the original character. To help the contractors the company gives them points to buy perks, lures(mind control or sex/romance/people skills) characters(those copy’s from earlier), templates and defenses the amount of points they receive is dependent on how powerful the world the contractor goes to. Also the contractor gets points for capturing characters and also from selling them.