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2024-10-24 15:23

A novel belonging in the fantasy category completely, this is due to the inconsistent knowledge used by the MC and the random resources generated with it. An example is to obtain clay the MC mixes soil with water which is possible to do, but then uses the clay to create an oven or maybe it was a forge 3x the size of the last one he had at the family keep without a time skip or any real explanation how it was established within a short period. The world background might have been stated at some point in the future of the story I just never got to it. MC is never given any details or anyone for that matter besides relation to MC. The story has no driving factor for the MC. It seemed the MC died at the start of the story could only assume heart attack or stoke maybe due to trauma, but arrives in new world with no signs of that happened. In addition sentece structuring is questionable at best and might need a rewrite (this is coming from me, which struggles with English too).

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Thank you for your insight and for taking the time to read my story. In the early chapters, I have written about the main character being reincarnated after being betrayed by his family. Immediately after his reincarnation, he learns about the life of the person whose body he has inherited. Driven by both his own emotions and those of the original person, the main character decides to take revenge against his family. It seems my reasoning hasn't resonated with the audience as I hoped, so I will rewrite it.

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I really look forward to rereading your story and thank you for reaching out.

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