I read the story until chapter 16, at the beginning it was interesting, but as the story progressed it started to lose sense, and little by little, every dialogue started to feel artificial, until the characters just seemed to have no life and the dialogue was there just because, filling almost the whole chapter of lifeless dialogues, with characters that seemed to have no life, for example Ais, seemed like just another character, talking normally without that Kuundere characteristic of his, the same with Ryuu who talked super eat, or how characters like May , the original cook of Restaurant .... are missing. the story felt good at the beginning, but then I couldn't take it anymore, I started to skip whole dialogues, until I simply got tired of how lifeless it felt, that I simply abandoned it, I can't imagine in my head the characters talking, because they look like NPC with a certain dialogue, that was the bad thing of the story, I still give you 4 stars because I know that writing is not easy, and it's only chapter 16, sure that later it will improve, but this is as far as it goes, good luck.

Shirou's personality is annoying, and he's often out of character. There are also moments when he displays incredible levels of stupidity.

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It has many things that I don't like, you can find it in the other ratings but the most annoying thing is that although it was interesting at first, it becomes very repetitive and the character becomes stupid very quickly.

This is a good novel, the storyline is neat and good, i'll waiting for the next update .............lezzz go boissssssz......................,..............................,..............................,................ ..............,..............................,................

Eu realmente não entendo... Esse mc é tudo, menos Emiya Shirou! Fora varias coisas desnecessárias, como por exemplo ele não querendo atualizar seu status, se ele não ia atualiza-lo porque entrar em uma família? Se ele quer ser excessivamente calteloso (o que não combina com Emiya) ele não devia ter entrado na família Loki! Porque não a família Hestia? Ele já conversou com Hestia, então ele deve ter percebido como é sua personalidade, fora o 'cheiro' dela. Eu só li até o capítulo 16, mas estou abandonado essa história, eu sei que é difícil escrever, eu nem reclamaria se fosse uma daquelas fanfics 'desligue o cérebro e leia.' Mas essa história realmente não faz sentido, mesmo em vários outros pontos. Outro ponto importante é a Lefiya levado ele (somente os 2) na masmorra... eu não vou nem comentar...

Idk to say,but this is a fanfic from chinese? I guess??,i reat it on sangtacviet and it have on that web....bruh ..............,btw ....................

me gusta como lleva la historia sin grandes mejoras que salen de la nad

Wow, your writing is very interesting and the language is very good. I'm curious when Hestia will enter Shiro's Harem and will there be an NFSW scene?? >_< Btw, the art is very good and interesting