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2024-09-26 17:14

Thanks for the story..................................... This story is really interesting and good....................................................................

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The world background is 5/5 on the account that DC has wide multiverse irrespective of the small chapters available. The Updating stability is 5/5, the same goes for Story development, since it's still too early to tell considering the few chapters. The problem comes from the character design and writing quality which is 1/5 and 3/5 respectively. I understand that writing is hard, but there are some things that should be avoided especially for an author that has written multiple books that are good compared to this in my opinion. Now the grammar is not why the writing quality is low, actually the grammar is adequate, so is the dialogue, paragraph spacing and so on which is actually why it's up to 3/5. The problem comes from the character design which lowers the writing quality. The MC was stated to be an adult with a job before he died. I'm also assuming he had a pretty normal childhood since it wasn't stated otherwise. The problem stems from the fact that despite all this, the MC still acts like a child despite his origin. It has always been a sore spot for me when the Isekai'd MC is so accepting of his new parents. I don't mean disrespecting them, cause that's stupid, but putting them in the same pedestal as his original parents, especially when he had a good childhood. If it was a bad childhood then that's different. But that I can tolerate, what I can't phantom is the childish behavior of the MC despite him commenting multiple times that he was an adult in his previous life. He acts like he's starved for affection or something. Well this my opinion on the novel, honestly I don't think I can go on, maybe the MC will get better later on, but I think that first impressions matter.

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