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2024-09-06 15:12

I like the story so far. The characters are well portrayed in the story, and the storyline keeps you at the edge of your seats. I praise the author for having good writing skills. However, I would like to advise the author to be careful of how you use exclamation marks when a character speaks. For example, when a character says, "I love it!", you can't say that they said those words 'calmly'. When there is an exclamation mark, it's to show that someone is exclaiming, crying or shouting words. I noticed that when Logan speaks. But that's a minor issue. Overall, the story is good and I would recommend it to others. Keep it up, author 馃槈

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