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2024-11-24 06:37

Biggest issue right now: Needs major editing and grammar corrections. Needs an editor to keep up with the translator. Essentially Translation speed is very good, but lots of minor errors are left behind. Some major things at the beginning which may turn way potential readers. Pros: Overall it’s a good start. While we haven’t yet reached the level of strength and fame, MC shows in the synopsis, it’s a good start in setting up character and world building.

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