It’s pretty great. The writing is amazing, the grammer and spelling are flawless. My only complaints mainly have to do with the content of the fanfic and not stuff like writing or spelling. Let’s start with the MC. Good ole basic reincarnation into a teenagers body, orphanage blah blah blah. Nothing new but that’s fine. Then we get to his powers… He is essentially Sunny 2.0. Yeah it’s kind of different but not really. I personally would have liked to see something other than darkness abilities but it’s not a deal breaker for me. The mc’s personality is okay, nothing to write home about. Then we have the pacing. Overall I’d say it’s not bad, however I do feel that there are a lot of time skips, like 30 days or 60 days that feel a little out of place. If there was just a bit more time or a few more paragraphs of what the mc went through during those time skips It would be fine. Basically, it has a fast pace, which isn’t bad, it just needs to be toned down a tiny bit more for my liking personally. Lastly we have the lead characters. Unfortunately, as of chapter 23, the mc hasn’t interacted with any and I mean literally any character from the original story. He has seen them, and had a bit of a staring contest, but that’s it. Having a fanfic mc that’s does his own thing is fine, but the whole essence of a fanfic in my opinion is to interact with lead characters and change some parts of the story because of it. And so far, that hasn’t happened. Overall though, it’s an amazing fanfiction. Even if none of my complaints are addressed I’ll still continue reading and enjoying the story im sure. I’ll be gladly looking forward to the future of this fic. I swear every Shadow Slave fanfiction I read gets dropped… I hope that isn’t the case for this one as it’s truly the best I’ve read.
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The MC starts hanging around the main cast around chapter 25
I found it boring to read, the descriptions and paragraphs are too long
