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XAZVAPB0OTH
XAZVAPB0OTHLv45mth
2024-08-18 17:06

The story seems good, it just seems like it, it's tiring and the protagonist's talent never seems to increase, speaking of talent, the protagonist has none of that, seriously, he depends entirely on the system, I don't even know how the talent system is calculated here, the protagonist has a sharingan, but it's useless, it takes months to learn a low-level jutsu, for high-level jutsus like shunshin no jutsu, they are entire simulations, it simply doesn't make sense, the protagonist (with sharingan) is worse than Obito before the sharingan. The translators are screwing themselves over to translate this, lol. Conclusion: unlike other fanfics in the webnovel, the system is not a crutch for the protagonist, it's his arms and legs.

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Emik01
Emik01Author

During the first 70 chapters, the story focuses on character development as he tries to survive a massacre.

XAZVAPB0OTH
XAZVAPB0OTHLv4

wow, 70 chapters

Emik01:During the first 70 chapters, the story focuses on character development as he tries to survive a massacre.
Requien
RequienLv15

if it really takes 70 chaps to survive one Situation then this story wont make it far i think

DarkKnight32
DarkKnight32Lv6

Bro what 70 ch then does the 4th ninja war happen only in ch 1000

Emik01:During the first 70 chapters, the story focuses on character development as he tries to survive a massacre.
Emik01
Emik01Author

By chapter 80, he will be more powerful than the Fourth Hokage. When I say development I meant how he get more mature and confident.

XAZVAPB0OTH
XAZVAPB0OTHLv4

But what about talent, did the protagonist achieve independence from the system or does he need 1 billion yen to make the system work?

RenegadeForLife
RenegadeForLifeLv14

I kind of hate it when a system protag suddenly becomes a genius on top of having a system. The system lets them keep up with geniuses. If they spontaneously gain similar talent on top of that then the story collapses. It also feels disingenuous that they weren't portrayed as talented from the start.

sans_5403
sans_5403Lv1

I really enjoyed your story, keep up the good work.

BLACKARMOUR
BLACKARMOURLv3

When reading MTL or fanfic, it's important to keep your expectations low. This approach will help you enjoy the content more, as high expectations can often lead to disappointment. 😔

Pikachu_4015
Pikachu_4015Lv2

really good work you had done translating a fantastic fan-fic

DaoistObvious
DaoistObviousLv14

?? What do you mean? 70 chapters to go from civillian level to kage-level is not at all slow.

Requien:if it really takes 70 chaps to survive one Situation then this story wont make it far i think
Humbuub
HumbuubLv4

don't forget he's like 6 yo and more powerful than Minato.

Emik01:By chapter 80, he will be more powerful than the Fourth Hokage. When I say development I meant how he get more mature and confident.
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