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ScorpianRed
ScorpianRedLv135mth
2024-11-02 05:50

Personally, I don't like doing this, but come on, the main character is completely illogical, despite a little change, it's still something that's unbearable. Come on, I didn't see anyone talking, so basically the guy became an orphan at 8 years old, and his sister managed to support him without him having many difficulties, so far so good, however, his mentality is that of a 13-year-old, no matter how antisocial he is, it doesn't justify the way he is, if he had a mental problem it would be different. His sister is an angel, if she were the main character she would be a super person, she can support the house, give her brother an allowance, clean the house and make food, i this in a job without a degree working in the daytime To get an idea of how detestable the MC is, if you put a Chinese young master and the MC side by side, 8 out of 10 people would choose the young master. But it's not all bad, the idea is interesting, you don't find writing errors all the time, the system could be better built but it's not bad, the consistency of the novel is good, well, unless involving the mc

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The ashamed author is here. Honestly, I wanted to delay writing this review a little longer, but after seeing a comment on the book that left me feeling a bit wronged😅, I decided to go ahead and write one. So, before I talk about the book itself, I’d like to address something about the protagonist, as the story revolves around him. He has ambition and aspirations, but lacks the motivation to work hard or put in the effort, always preferring the easy way despite having some abilities. He’s unsociable, and even though he lost his parents at the age of eight, his older sister still shielded him from the world. Now, what happens when someone like him doesn’t just have "some" ability but an "enormous" one? What would he choose? What could he achieve? This is one of the themes of my book, and why, despite not wanting to write about an eighteen-year-old boy who hasn’t experienced much and has been living in his own closed-off world, I decided to take the risk. I chose the age of eighteen, at the end of high school, because I felt it’s one of the most pivotal periods in a person’s life. As the protagonist gains his Idle System, his "cheat," and navigates this stage of life, what will he choose? And why? That’s what the first volume of my novel is about. It’s the [Prologue], after all, with chapters filled with the protagonist’s inner thoughts. I wanted to capture these moments of youth, and while they could be embarrassing, unbearable, overwhelming, or more, they are still memorable. I also hoped to make them engaging for readers. The transition during this period, after the protagonist gets his Idle System, then he faces his first crush, his first problem, and starts figuring out what he really wants, that’s where the story picks up. I wanted to explore the difference between his thoughts and actions, or if there is any at all. In the end, I don’t consider myself that I have succeed, but it’s not too bad, and I do feel like I’ve improved along the way. So, where am I going with all this? It’s about a comment I read, calling my protagonist a simp and stupid. As a reader, I’ve always hated that kind of thing the most, but seeing my protagonist labeled like that, while I still respect everyone’s opinions, it’s something I couldn’t quite accept. This is called character development, because there’s a reason behind his actions, and even then, I don’t think he did that wrong thing. Inexperience isn’t the same as simping or stupidity. It’s just that when you face something new, mistakes happen, and the important part is learning from them and not repeating them. And looking back, I still don’t know what these mistakes are, as no one has pointed them out. Or maybe that’s just my opinion? Anyway, now that I finished my venting, let’s move on to the book. Or, rather, what is there to talk about? The chapters so far are mainly about the protagonist, and the world-building is still in its early stages. But I can tell you this: there are things written that could be considered signs or flags in the chapters, and the upcoming volumes will explore them. Now that the protagonist is borderline above normal people and nearing the ceiling of ordinary abilities, what will he become? And what will happen next? Hopefully, the upcoming chapters will be even better. Thanks to everyone who has read my book. If you have any questions, feel free to comment here, and I’ll do my best to answer them!

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