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HcS10
HcS10Author2mth
2024-09-04 01:55

Author here. Well, we've reached 50 chapters in the story, so I thought it would be a good time to do a review. This is the first book I'm writing, so I'm always open to suggestions and critiques. Feel free to ask any questions here. Some important points: - The MC is only 14 years old, so it's normal for him to go through phases where he's arrogant, rebellious, in love... He will mature a lot throughout the story. - This isn't a story where the MC quickly becomes invincible and OP, you can expect a lot of training and truly challenging opponents. - There is romance, but don't expect anything too soon since the MC is only 14 years old. - I intend to develop various different characters, and most of them will have their own journey, so don't worry if you like a specific character and are afraid they'll be forgotten. - The story is a mix of comedy, romance, and slice-of-life, but the main focus is baseball. You can also expect a bit of drama.

The Old Baseball Player System

HcS10
4.3
196 Chs

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Mister_Robot
Mister_RobotLv4

A very interesting sports novel. Good use of a baseball system and pacing is commendable as well. My only complaint is with the MC. I find his character very annoying. He feels more like an annoying side character. His friends Kenta or Ren would make a better MC, but that's just my opinion. I hope there's character development.

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TeneT
TeneTLv14

Very good novel dont drop author. Big potential [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

2mth
Hezii_2G
Hezii_2GLv15

So far I’m through 96 chapters and I must say it’s really good for the authors first light novel. Minor inconsistencies here and there, but overall a very solid story. The overall quality is even better than some veteran LN authors. Main thing is I haven’t gotten the brain rot from overwhelming plot armor or blockheadead things and poor grammar. Would def recommend to any sports LN enthusiasts.

1mth
DarkDrake
DarkDrakeLv6

never been into sports, but the system based story got me interested.

2mth
AKG_1436
AKG_1436Lv4

good work man keeping going. it pleasure to read this novel

3mth
_anurag012
_anurag012Lv3

it's good. It's just that i don't have money. so i can only say keep it up. and msg me if this has limited free thing.

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Estreiger
EstreigerLv5

Todo iba bien hasta el capitulo 49, "justo antes de poner todos los capitulos de pago" se volvio loco y mejoro el talento aleatoriamente de muchisimas personas para que el mc ya no destaque tanto y parezca otro del monton y como si no fuera suficiente, le regala un systema de beisbol al rival "que obviamente es el as de su antiguo equipo" no pierdan el tiempo

1mth
NashP7
NashP7Lv14

So far so good! I’m really enjoying reading this, following Shuns journey is really fun. He trains very hard & has a real passion for baseball. He’s very young so he’s quite immature and makes mistakes but that’s okay. If anything it’s better that he’s far from perfect as he’s developing as a player and a person all at the same time. I’m interested to see where the story progresses from here on out!

2mth
Lucius_Frey
Lucius_FreyLv15

Decent story but the the main character has all the worst qualities making it hard to read( He’s dumb, untalented, emotional, nosy, etc…)

1mth
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