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HcS10
HcS10Author7mth
2024-09-04 01:55

Author here. Well, we've reached 50 chapters in the story, so I thought it would be a good time to do a review. This is the first book I'm writing, so I'm always open to suggestions and critiques. Feel free to ask any questions here. Some important points: - The MC is only 14 years old, so it's normal for him to go through phases where he's arrogant, rebellious, in love... He will mature a lot throughout the story. - This isn't a story where the MC quickly becomes invincible and OP, you can expect a lot of training and truly challenging opponents. - There is romance, but don't expect anything too soon since the MC is only 14 years old. - I intend to develop various different characters, and most of them will have their own journey, so don't worry if you like a specific character and are afraid they'll be forgotten. - The story is a mix of comedy, romance, and slice-of-life, but the main focus is baseball. You can also expect a bit of drama.

The Old Baseball Player System

HcS10
4.1
216 Chs

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Daoist2GeKve
Daoist2GeKveLv12

pls continue the novel

3mth
1
Invincible
InvincibleLv13

Manhwa: King of the Mound Its story very similar to this Novel!!!

3mth
1
Myo_Seck_Paing_9329
Myo_Seck_Paing_9329Lv2

Pls do not drop the novel author .Good plot and very enjoyable

1mth
Other Reviews
Mister_Robot
Mister_RobotLv4

A very interesting sports novel. Good use of a baseball system and pacing is commendable as well. My only complaint is with the MC. I find his character very annoying. He feels more like an annoying side character. His friends Kenta or Ren would make a better MC, but that's just my opinion. I hope there's character development.

6mth

TeneT
TeneTLv14

Very good novel dont drop author. Big potential [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

7mth
Hezii_2G
Hezii_2GLv15

So far I’m through 96 chapters and I must say it’s really good for the authors first light novel. Minor inconsistencies here and there, but overall a very solid story. The overall quality is even better than some veteran LN authors. Main thing is I haven’t gotten the brain rot from overwhelming plot armor or blockheadead things and poor grammar. Would def recommend to any sports LN enthusiasts.

6mth
DarkDrake
DarkDrakeLv6

never been into sports, but the system based story got me interested.

7mth
AKG_1436
AKG_1436Lv4

good work man keeping going. it pleasure to read this novel

8mth
holmes_morales
holmes_moralesLv14

Great story with a character that shows development at a steady pace and is passionate about the game itself. Only issue is the drop in update speed

3mth
Cooper_Davis_9512
Cooper_Davis_9512Lv14

I’m a big fan of this story, my only complaint is that the update frequency is not consistent and I would love to have more chapters to read.

3mth
holmes_morales
holmes_moralesLv14

Amazing story with a gradual progress that isn’t too fast paced but also isn’t slow with a working protagonist who is not just muscle but has a good baseball iq, only downside might be the inconsistent chapter updates

4mth
_anurag012
_anurag012Lv4

it's good. It's just that i don't have money. so i can only say keep it up. and msg me if this has limited free thing.

5mth
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