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2024-07-27 02:47

This is like fast food. It is quite widespread. MC is very good , he is not beta MC so I accept it . The grammar is a bit rigid. In general, this fanfic is not bad.

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Spelloyal
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3.8 stars My main criteria for rating a fic in general is to give 5 stars to everything that's a little below average and above, and take stars off based on how horrible, avoidable, or frustrating an issue is. The problems in this fic are all of the easily avoidable and somewhat frustrating kind. Translation Quality: 3 stars. Overall it's good, with the big problem being wrong terms like Falis instead of Valis or the author completely getting the name of an important place like Hostess of Fertility wrong. These are errors that are really frustrating because they are very basic, but they do not make reading impossible like MTL. Stability of Updates: 5 stars. More than one chapter per day (at the time of posting this review). Story Development: 3 Stars. 3 stars Again, overall it's good and interesting, but it lacks a lot in the details. I'm giving it 3 stars because although they are errors that don't affect the course of the story in general, they are very frustrating and the author doesn't bother to correct them even when a reader points out the error. Some more striking examples are the MC and his almost lvl 2 Familia suffering through a 30km marathon lasting 2 hours when the MC's training involved days of running non-stop from dawn to dusk through a mountain full of traps is simply ridiculous. This is without taking into account that a mundane athlete holds the world record of 42km in 2 hours, so even without training and breathing techniques a lvl 1 adventurer who spends the whole day fighting in the dungeon should be able to run a marathon effortlessly. The author also got several other details wrong, such as the comparison of Netero and Meruem's power levels in relation to an adventurer. Another mistake was calling In En and the MC knowing how to do this before even learning Nen. These are all basic details that do not affect the story in general but could also be easily avoided if the author bothered to do some minimal research or read reader comments pointing out these errors and then correcting them. Character Design: 5 stars. It's ok, nothing special, but nothing bad either and in fanfics my standard is to give 5 stars to everything that is acceptable and then take points off depending on how frustrating and simple a problem is. World Background: 3 stars. Again because of frustrating, easily avoidable errors that don't interfere that much with the story in general and that the author does not bother to correct even when readers point out. Conclusion: It's a good read with the caveat of extremely frustrating small problems, I recommend following this fic unless these problems are the kind of thing that makes you drop a fic.

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