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Jordzfml
JordzfmlLv47mth
2024-09-02 16:43

good story. the way the mc treats sini at night honestly disgusts me , like bud she's crying from pain and literally no mention of pleasure . it makes me skip the entire chapter , please improve .

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BigWhiteGoose
BigWhiteGooseAuthor

I'm glad you can give some advice, it's too important for my creation.

Jordzfml
JordzfmlLv4

yeah np. it's a great story and i wouldn't want to drop it over something that's easily improvable 👍

BigWhiteGoose:I'm glad you can give some advice, it's too important for my creation.
Dariusthesinister
DariusthesinisterLv1

would you like to read my novel symbiogen ?

BigWhiteGoose
BigWhiteGooseAuthor

TKS[img=recommend][img=recommend]

Jordzfml:yeah np. it's a great story and i wouldn't want to drop it over something that's easily improvable 👍
Sage_Soul_3748
Sage_Soul_3748Lv3

hows the story so far bro 🙂

Jordzfml
JordzfmlLv4

honestly it's a great story , well written , my only downside was their night-life but that's just my personal preference. you should give it a read

Sage_Soul_3748:hows the story so far bro 🙂
DaoistArbore
DaoistArboreLv14

Was their nightlife? Buddy you are way too damn laid back about reading what amounts to r*pe. Thanks for the warning, I can drop this trash

Jordzfml:honestly it's a great story , well written , my only downside was their night-life but that's just my personal preference. you should give it a read
Jordzfml
JordzfmlLv4

it's been a while since i read it but from what I remember everything was consented? the only part that threw me off was the mentioning of pain instead of pleasure but I don't remember any scene with the mc forcing himself onto someone ?

DaoistArbore:Was their nightlife? Buddy you are way too damn laid back about reading what amounts to r*pe. Thanks for the warning, I can drop this trash
SYED_AFAQ
SYED_AFAQLv4

author is there any Yuri or ntr in it

BigWhiteGoose:TKS[img=recommend][img=recommend]
matthew_viola
matthew_violaLv10

Please read my review, I really want to know why you keep nerfing John! Its infuriating.

BigWhiteGoose:I'm glad you can give some advice, it's too important for my creation.
Vanix_
Vanix_Lv4

no

Dariusthesinister:would you like to read my novel symbiogen ?
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