The story was okay, maybe needed some work in some parts of the narrative, but nothing too serious. The problem for me was when for no reason at all they gave our MC who was already very strong and could get stronger with his own efforts a ridiculously OP ability. Other than that the dialogues need some improvement. I see potential but I don't hold out much hope for its future, everyone likes OP MCs, until they get bored of them, which happens a lot faster than you'd think.
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look pal, you should read all chapters before review. but op power is only for mc so he could take story to grand scale (just like my favourite multiverse of Marvel ff) it's depends on how much you understand the story Fgo fans like myself Will like the interaction between fate characters with Marvel. it's never about op mc story but about a story of mc who trying to save the humanity after going through suffering. after all both Peter Parker and Ritsuka fujimaru needs to have good Life like in this world. and I will improve the writing but you should not expect much from fanfiction hey atleast this story is not about Chinese edge mc who goes around every Marvel female girls. with no character development or personalities. from chapter 1 to 28 i improved may be not much but better than before. i know you are not saying negative but it's not feels good to see a review of a person who read upto 16 chapters not full 🌕🙂↔️🙂↕️
I understand where you're coming from, but I didn't think my review was that harsh. There are points to improve, and room to do so since your story is just beginning. That aside, don't let my subjective assessment discourage you, at the end of the day it's just my opinion, and I'm certainly not a professional. I'll continue reading for a while, and maybe change my review later, though I make no promises about whether or not I'll like your story, since I don't see the future, though if you're really going to focus on the things you say, I'll probably end up liking it a lot. One last thing, from one writer to another, don't let these things bother you too much, if you think I'm right about something, fine and if you don't, that's okay too, stand by your idea and your work, people can be pretty cruel online, eventually there will be someone who will leave you a review full of horrible things just because they can, just keep that in mind and ignore those things.
no, it's okay but i really appreciate your review. I was sad that if you read all chapters and tell me where to improve. most people won't saw what you said. and i will wait in future. take care [img=coins]
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hey man , does this mc have a hero complex ? cause personally i prefer anti-heroes
