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Rudra_Khatri
Rudra_KhatriLv410d
2024-11-16 19:15

I really want to read this, I love Dungeon Master/Summoner kind of novels but damn 10 chapters stright and absolutely no story at all. Worldbuilding should be done by story Devlopment not by info dumping. Author should have done it like this. Story starts, 30 days pass away and as story progresses the narrative will move back to the past to explain how it was done, or maybe the characters can talk and you find out from their talk about the whole empires and stuff, you can do a lot but it just feels dull from the first 10 chapters.

Creating The Hardest Dungeon With my 1000X talent

Danger_Zone_69
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Danger_Zone_69
Danger_Zone_69Author

Thanks for your feedback. I am still trying to improve my writing quality. As for the information dumping, I did it like this because, when I personally read other novels I also like to have prior information about some subjects. so I wrote my novel as a style as I usually like to read.

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CHAOS_REB
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It has potential but the writing quality at this moment is bad. No right spacing or use of punctuation marks to make the words become better. When the author remove this error then this book is good to go

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Having read through all the free chapters the author had some very creative and novel ideas. however, there was no story development, we really only see one character and they are pretty flat. Status screens take up significant space ( although they are far more creative, when I usually see this happening). Writing quality was decent.

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Dacia_xiao
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Thanks for a Wonderful story. Storyline development has potential. Please author release more chapter.

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Tsniper
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Good story thus far. It has potential to be a hit, Grammer issues are found and some chapters are bland. would be interesting to see some perspective of adventures about to stumble upon his dungeon or some senior dungeon masters seeing a new name rising the ranks fast.

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Will75
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I liked the story and it has potential but there are a couple of problems. One is grammar I’m not at all an expert in grammar but I can clearly see you misspelled many words or completely forgot to write some. This makes overall writing quality horrible. You could solve this by maybe going back to read it over and make changes. Two the information dumps need to be spaced out. While it did help give an over impression of the world background. It also kind’ve made the story a little boring. Anyways I believe this story has potential and I hope you can develop its potential to the fullest

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