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Bigboi9000
Bigboi9000Lv45mth
2024-07-29 07:30

Started off really well! Didn’t see many grammar errors, and I love the story so far!! Keep it up author 👍🏼

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YoungCreator
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Im_LaZy_007
Im_LaZy_007Lv13

bro, is this harem or Single FL?

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YoungCreator
YoungCreatorAuthor

Nope. It's not

Im_LaZy_007:bro, is this harem or Single FL?
YoungCreator
YoungCreatorAuthor

Single FL

Im_LaZy_007:bro, is this harem or Single FL?
Ayce_o_Spade
Ayce_o_SpadeLv15

Maybe two female leads?

YoungCreator:Single FL
YoungCreator
YoungCreatorAuthor

There will be many potential Female Leads for sure, but MC would end up with one

Ayce_o_Spade:Maybe two female leads?
Ayce_o_Spade
Ayce_o_SpadeLv15

Oof. I know you may hate hearing this but maybe consider going with a full on harem. People don’t really like the anime pseudo harem thing. Just some food for thought brotha.

YoungCreator:There will be many potential Female Leads for sure, but MC would end up with one
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THE_ARCHITECT
THE_ARCHITECTLv4

I am going to divide my rating into different sections and I am going to be transparent Writing quality Not many words but it's almost perfect, there are minor errors here and there but it's really good...as I said not many words Story development it is severely lacking in terms of exposure but it does have a lot of potential, the flow of the story makes the MC go with the flow as if he's not alive, i would like him to make choices of his own in the future Character Design As i said before the story is too fast, i want to know about the MC and his past life, the true objective of the system , the lives of the side characters...i want them to be alive Updating quality i simply wish there were more chapters the story is pretty good World building it is severely lacking at least for me, continents, rulers , destruction , Gods , ancestors , enemies e.t.c , The academy arc felt rushed to me because he could've developed mentally first but you do you Conclusion The story is not unique but it's not generic in any way, the MC slightly feels like an NPC since he doesn't have many monologues or internal thoughts and the side characters could've more exposure so i can connect with them The story has potential no... immense potential to grow, the author may be a newbie but she/he/they/them is/are doing very well just improve the flow and look it from a perspective of a reader, I am adding this to my collections and I am looking forward to your future works cause i can see that this is your learning curve...i am sorry if i was brutal or offensive

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