OK, this is the first time I'm writing a review for a fanfic this early but I hope the Author sees this and takes it as constructive criticism. the foundation of the story had tremendous potential with the human MC and fire force power but the MC lost all his brain cells when he transmigrated. He acts like a joke gag character for one-piece instead of a normal person with normal reactions which makes him feel dumb. Also, the dialogue is written too close together making it difficult to know who is talking. Author, I think you should keep the premise for the story but rewrite/edit it so the characters seem realistic instead of dumb

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Really enjoyed your story with the humor you put in, a little bit disappointed that MC always chase Goku and Vegeta but can never be a little stronger or at least equal to them.

I just finished reading "The End," and I wanted to share my thoughts without giving away any spoilers. This fanfiction really captures the essence of Dragon Ball. It doesn't take itself too seriously, which is a key part of what makes Dragon Ball so special. If someone were to complain that a Dragon Ball fanfic isn't serious enough, I would wonder if they truly understand the show. The main character starts out as a regular human and struggles in the beginning, which I found relatable even though he does have a system. The fanfiction feels like a true extension of the early Dragon Ball series, and that feeling continues to grow as the story progresses through the different arcs. The main character is endearing and will make you fall in love with the series all over again, especially with the way he interacts with the rest of the cast. It feels like Goku got the brother he deserves, and the forgotten characters get the attention that was sorely needed. I encourage you to read this fanfiction but try not to approach it with a critical mindset influenced by other works. Dragon Ball has always incorporated humor, and if you approach it too seriously, you might miss the point. Instead, approach it with the same joy and wonder that you experienced when you first watched the series. Now, raise your hands in the air because Goku needs that energy!

love it very sample and very fast paced. need moooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooorrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

I came to check out this. I saw this because of your pokemon fiction, and I'll check it out

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