hmm my writing is awful try to ignore the blanks or mispelled stephen.

Thanks for the feedback, first of all. I do need to work upon the character interaction and I am working upon it in future chapters. I don't get why Gray won't be able to beat Wolf in this version? He still has his intelligence and he has also taken regular training from Felix. IMO he should be able to defeat Wolf in a much better way than in canon. I'll also work upon diverging more from Canon. Please provide me with such feedback on my mistakes whenever you feel like. Have a Good Day!

Okay i believe gray should've lost even without his fear of rooftops not playing an part as he doesn't have the same drive or anger for bullies he did in the Original due to stephan being alive and im sure he worked on his fighting intelligencd and fighting drive during the time stephan died,(Before plot started this is all an assumption that i very much believe) Also try to have the Mc change the story/Plot as everything progressing the same he's only making friends with characters gray made which is fine but it feels massively forced he should be able to get along with others due to his diffrent tendecies and looks. Which also came to the point where i believe the romance whether harem or not will mess the fic up as the interactions are low and im assuming they'll have the same reaction they did for gray as every plot character treating the mc in gray place so if you do end up on the romance make them react diffrent wheather due to his looks, height or fighting skills as it feels bland, This is criticism that i had and saying because i believe the author will really try to fix these mistakes and hope he won't drop or rewrite as it hadn't gotten too deep into the other novels, He'll just have to make mc not the same as the others so in breakers he could be enemies with the Mc and also be having problems with the whole verse or friendly with a few but not all, Major hope for author and keep on improving👍 Hope i ain't sound like a major ----- you know...

Thanks for the criticism. I will surely work upon it. I am always open for good criticism like this. Thanks!

Heyy Murphy, I was wondering about something. Didn’t you create One Piece fanfic before? It was called One Piece: A Dream You told me a while ago that you haven’t dropped it nd planned to continue updating in June but it’s suddenly deleted. May I know what was the reason? Because I was acc looking forward to it. It’s actually a shame you didn’t wanna continue it cuz it has a lot of potential.