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DetachedDreamer
DetachedDreamerLv145mth
2024-07-16 11:56

I tried to give this another shot but it gets worse in my eyes. the MC has zero personality. there is zero character growth. he doesn't have hobbies. he doesn't have likes. all he wants is to be the the ruler but that also gives him zero joy. he's never expeesses any amount of emotion, I believe he's just a powerful robot. has he laughed? what entertains him? or is just getting stronger supposed to be it? lol thats the whole this story? stronger and stronger, conquer but never actually live. you're missing every detail to make him relatable. Im pretty sure the author was bullied so this is how his mc turned out. some bum who can't have friends and has to force them to like him, subserviently. lol I get it, but it gets better buddy. start with writing an actually human instead of this dumb*ss robot you call an MC. like every other character is just forgotten. there's no substance. I like red alert too but thats about the only thing you did right in this story.

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Chryst_AO
Chryst_AOLv3

Reveal spoiler

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Cesar117
Cesar117Lv2

Por el momento es una historia interesante. Aunque siento que el autor está desperdiciando completamente el mundo y los personajes de HOTD ya que apenas se hace mención a ellos y no hay nada lascivo en la historia. Creo firmemente que un fanfiction de HOTD sin harem y R18 es como una historia de dragón ball z sin los Saiyajin.

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AinzO0alGown
AinzO0alGownLv14

My man you need gold, have you heard of NATIONAL GOLD DEPOSITS???????

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Kuroganne
KuroganneLv13

The choice of Red alert units make it a very interesting addition to the story and I am anticipating the way it goes, the only thing that I don't see the reason for is why start in HOTD if you aren't going to use any of the characters there, the execution is not bad is just there's a lot of lost potential here, as it stands it could be any other zombie story and it wouldn't make it any different.

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notlair
notlairLv5

Very interesting plot, the translation is good , Pretty good story,

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SlimeSage
SlimeSageLv14

Like it, its quite different from usual fanfics like a breath of fresh air, yk what I mean….

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Lilly_f
Lilly_fLv4

It’s really a good story

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Ri_On
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