I really wanted to like this since Magi is my favorite manga, I can't. The interactions don't feel real at all and the characters don't feel unique(like how everyone treats obito as a idiot most of the time despite always trying to be helpful) like they do in naruto or anything. The author also doesn't stay consistent to the naruto verse at all. Obito is competent at the start somehow(when he is the weakest until his ms awakening) and then the author just decides to create teams of two and it's just because "why not" like are we fr now? You need to at least be consistent with the world background and also hiruzen is super conniving as well as danzo so they would most likely conspire something for the mc but all we get is a Chinese dialogue option from hiruzen and nothing from danzo. Another problem with the dialogue between people is it's one dimensional like there is no thought put into it like are we fr naming real people(in context of the mc being in the real naruto world) Teacher #1-3 like you could at least give them a real name. TLDR: Wouldn't really recommend it isn't anything great but if u like brain rot or are new to fan fics give it a try. Author suggestion: I suggest rewriting the entire thing after a few months of practicing writing and getting better.
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I agree with everything but the third hokage is only conniving to those deserving of it, but the fanfic community decided to explain away the plot holes by making him darker than hes shown in the manga and show. During his second reign, hes definitely at fault for not preventing many of the crimes in the village but not out of intent to do harm but because he was lacking severely in strength and judgment of who he should trust. he failed as a hokage. spin it the way yall want but yall throw dirt on the OG story by distorting the authors vision. this may not apply to this review because i dont know if the MC is against the village or not but if he's not then my statement stands.
