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MrFalan
MrFalanLv148mth
2024-08-10 00:56

I will be dropping it not because it's bad this is a lot better than many works out there but not my cup of tea for the reasons: 1. The tragedy of side characters feels too forced for the plot. 2. The main character does not show the maturity expected. While this can be explained by MC living a new life in a fantasy feeling like he has a plot behind him he also does not display wisdom and intelligence. 3. Most importantly chapter prices were okay at 12 coins but he started to increase them and also put 16 coins for chapters after the cliffhanger.

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Terlik
TerlikAuthor

Thank you very much for your comment and criticism. But I don't set the chapter coins or maybe I don't know how to do it yet. I can only set the coins for privilege sections and I can't fix it until next month because of the rules.

Ahmed_Bhai_9711
Ahmed_Bhai_9711Lv2

Will Luciana and her daughters join the harem too? If yes, then I will give it a go, or else I don't want to bother reading a story, where there are beautiful females who get significant screen time in the plot, but then they don't join the harem.

Terlik:Thank you very much for your comment and criticism. But I don't set the chapter coins or maybe I don't know how to do it yet. I can only set the coins for privilege sections and I can't fix it until next month because of the rules.
Aayann_
Aayann_Lv14

I felt the same

Ahmed_Bhai_9711:Will Luciana and her daughters join the harem too? If yes, then I will give it a go, or else I don't want to bother reading a story, where there are beautiful females who get significant screen time in the plot, but then they don't join the harem.
Bibongsensei
BibongsenseiLv4

i got a feeling that the oldest sister wants to marry someone for helping his brother

Ahmed_Bhai_9711:Will Luciana and her daughters join the harem too? If yes, then I will give it a go, or else I don't want to bother reading a story, where there are beautiful females who get significant screen time in the plot, but then they don't join the harem.
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Alanray64
Alanray64Lv15

Pretty good read formthis story, I scored this mostly 4s, with 2 fives given, mainly because it is early stages and I did feel the early chapters were a bit long winded (my own personal opinion) Story is of a guy, History Teacher, who meets truck-kun and is transmigrated/reborn into another world, I will admit the transmigration arc was rather well done and, at least for me, introduced some insight into those moments between dying and rebirth. So enter MC as the 3rd Prince of a Kingdom, who appreciates his new life and family (orphan vibes, really cant miss that), not so much his father the King as he turns out to be led by his balls by the 2nd Queen who later the readers find that she really wants the MC gone as he is a threat to her plans. During the chapters, a clear antagonist is revealed and it feels like one of those end game setups, so it is a watch this space development. Anyways I’ve read all the available 40 chapters and found the story of interest. The onky downside I’ve come across is he is quick to anger and doesn’t appear to have the wisdom to temper this yet, but I guess being 12 it may improve. I feel the anger sparks might be due to one of his alignments magic for darkness, but will see. Overall, characters are written well, villains are clearly defined and the elements of kingdom building are beginning to show (thoroughly enjoy kingdom building novels). I’m not sure if I can provide any advice or direction to the author as it, to date, pretty well done, though maybe don’t let the MC go full on bloodthirsty as he needs a cool head on his shoulders to create history.

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