I like this story, it's quite entertaining to a certain extent, but if I had to point out its bad points they would be the following: 1) The romance is too fast, I understand that there may be many romantic interests in the future, but literally profess eternal love on the second day knowing each other is terrible. It would have been better for you to lengthen the travel time between cities or the time they spend outdoors, you know to get to know each other better and so that love is not so forced, you could have used short jumps in time and told the facts in a correct way and concise if it seemed too difficult to you. 2) The way he catches shiny pokemon so easily is baffling, apart from the fact that it would be impossible to find a group of charmanders in the wild (on a very busy route), the fact that he finds so many shiny ones so quickly in the story It's not funny. It's been 4 or 5 days since he was reincarnated and he already has a complete team and two girlfriends for the second gym. 3) The dialogues are too forced and unnatural, they seem like something processed by a computer or a kind of Chinese translation. I mean it's not the worst but it literally kills my excitement watching the dialogue and descriptions. 4) And perhaps the most critical point, limiting movements to only 4 makes no sense in reality.
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