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SBASSELv136mth
2024-10-07 21:23

The plot of this novel has really big potential but gets ruined by the writing. There is 1 chapter that got skipped. So many typos, he, she etc. Past, present, and future tense needs to be fixed. Overall its 6/10 if you could get past some chapters which literally give you stroke while reading. But has a potential to be 11/10 with better writing. ps. still going to read

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Ahhhhh, where do I even begin with this one? This story’s got potential—a real banger, easily top 50 on WebNovel. Grammar’s a bit shaky, but hey, it’s good enough that you don’t mind too much. But then… the author starts hittin’ you with clichés, and the MC? Man, he was this close to turnin’ into a full-on wimp. Glad he finally grew a pair and took out those bastards after they killed the servant woman, but that scene? Just one giant, nasty cliché. It’s no wonder the comments went radio silent after that chapter. This coulda been one of the greatest stories on here, but I think the author’s got it twisted. Just ‘cause the MC starts out as a servant doesn’t mean he needs some grand tragedy to justify becoming a villain. Hate to break it to ya, but this guy? He’s no villain. Not even an anti-hero. Dude watches the woman who raised him get forced to stab herself just ‘cause someone ordered it, and what’s he do? Flashes some “killing intent” and just stands there. Like, buddy, you just got her killed. Could’ve seen it coming a mile away—these people tried to pull something shady just a day before, and he’s still clueless. And then he goes on to snag the top spot in the academy did he think they were gonna congratulate him? Makes no sense. I’ll say it again: even the lowliest servants back in the day knew when to break a rule, throw a punch, stand up for somethin’. Sure, some got killed for it, but at least they went out with their heads held high. They didn’t just stand around lookin’ dumb while people they cared about got hurt. It’s time the author dials down on the “tragic backstory” nonsense and gives us an MC who’s got a bit more grit, ‘cause right now, he’s fallin’ flat. If the Mc story is rewritten, take out a the one big cliche, and think of a creative way for him to gain enemies or become the villain you desire, story is easily up there for one of the top reads….good luck to the author

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