I'm only giving u this rating because things r different but u pretty much copied getting a technology system in modern day and you changed it where they have no mana so there you go and the female is way more active in the story
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LIKEi can deal with him making an empire because I know where it is heading but i swear to GOD if u later say that he sends all of the people who disagree with him to others planets or if someone in one of those ships finds a planet and helps create a species that then joins said empire like bro try creating your own story and don't steal major points from others like u have done a good job on the characters building even a little bitter than got to technology system in the modern day so I do hope that u try your own ideas.