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shut_inLv1410mth
2024-06-15 06:13

the honest review is this fic literally just harem in marvel, even though the story starts with clear background of MC, it's started to go sideways with MJ and Gwen when the story started to get interesting behold a wild carol danver came and the MC start to flirt. This fic just felt like it's going nowhere.

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OneArmedImmortal
OneArmedImmortalAuthor

casual flirting nowadays is a crime I see... touch some grass and the novel's not harem jus' because of the existence of female side characters... Really can't blame you tho since most Marvel fics use both MJ n Gwen as harem templates

shut_in
shut_inLv14

flirting is not a crime and I understand the situation of MJ and Gwen as the right before the USB being used you already wrote the relationship between them, but it is annoying for the reader when you throw the scene of carol in there right when the MC want to explore the power or thing he can get from the USB. And also i think that the star that i give appropriate for the background story, writing quality, and character background. The only thing that i don't like is the flow of the story get interrupted by the relationship that you want the MC to have.

OneArmedImmortal:casual flirting nowadays is a crime I see... touch some grass and the novel's not harem jus' because of the existence of female side characters... Really can't blame you tho since most Marvel fics use both MJ n Gwen as harem templates
SkillsMasterAkurai
SkillsMasterAkuraiLv14

Is this fanfic your own work or is it a translation?

OneArmedImmortal:casual flirting nowadays is a crime I see... touch some grass and the novel's not harem jus' because of the existence of female side characters... Really can't blame you tho since most Marvel fics use both MJ n Gwen as harem templates
OneArmedImmortal
OneArmedImmortalAuthor

it's my own work... I'm just using the cheat(idea) from the original novel "I Have A Super USB Drive" to create my own spin in Marvel. You should read the original here on WebNovel if you haven't.

SkillsMasterAkurai:Is this fanfic your own work or is it a translation?
SkillsMasterAkurai
SkillsMasterAkuraiLv14

Author… honestly is always rewarded *paidchatter emote*

OneArmedImmortal:it's my own work... I'm just using the cheat(idea) from the original novel "I Have A Super USB Drive" to create my own spin in Marvel. You should read the original here on WebNovel if you haven't.
tourezx
tourezxLv6

thanks for saving my time

FrogOnCrack
FrogOnCrackLv2

if you can't take this level of basic criticism, don't even bother coming to the reviews. your ears will start steaming.

OneArmedImmortal:casual flirting nowadays is a crime I see... touch some grass and the novel's not harem jus' because of the existence of female side characters... Really can't blame you tho since most Marvel fics use both MJ n Gwen as harem templates
Danna_3256
Danna_3256Lv4

thanks 4 the warning, i really hate harem stories since it will only make me feel pity for the author since many of the readers will think that only lonely people in real life will create this kind of stories.

shut_in
shut_inLv14

thanks i guess? i don't really care if it is a harem story, to me the flow of the story is also important in writing especially when writing a fic. i mean if you write something that might be getting axe in the middle might as well make it interesting.

Danna_3256:thanks 4 the warning, i really hate harem stories since it will only make me feel pity for the author since many of the readers will think that only lonely people in real life will create this kind of stories.
THIZZGATOR
THIZZGATORLv4

why would you leave such a passive aggressive comment on a fairly tame review?

OneArmedImmortal:casual flirting nowadays is a crime I see... touch some grass and the novel's not harem jus' because of the existence of female side characters... Really can't blame you tho since most Marvel fics use both MJ n Gwen as harem templates
Samriddh_Singh
Samriddh_SinghLv4

Question from me how much male interaction and friends does MC have and how many of them don't involve them talking about girls. And how much biase does he show towards females as compared to males . ( this is a real problem on webnovel)

OneArmedImmortal:casual flirting nowadays is a crime I see... touch some grass and the novel's not harem jus' because of the existence of female side characters... Really can't blame you tho since most Marvel fics use both MJ n Gwen as harem templates
_UnmotivatedYouth_
_UnmotivatedYouth_Lv14

Is it harem ??

OneArmedImmortal:casual flirting nowadays is a crime I see... touch some grass and the novel's not harem jus' because of the existence of female side characters... Really can't blame you tho since most Marvel fics use both MJ n Gwen as harem templates
OneArmedImmortal
OneArmedImmortalAuthor

Nah

_UnmotivatedYouth_:Is it harem ??
AdamFlores
AdamFloresLv4

I generally don't tend to read non-harem stories in worlds with so many beautiful and powerful women.... But just out of pure curiosity, who is the love interest? I sincerely hope it is someone like Wanda or Jean Gray, and not some random girl with little to no powers.

OneArmedImmortal:Nah
Danna_3256
Danna_3256Lv4

for me the moment i see harem stories i will dropped the story at that moment also if the mc names used illogical names such as monkey.d.insert chinese names or uchiha along with chinese stupid names i will not even bother to read it.

Danna_3256
Danna_3256Lv4

imagine the moment you want to read chapter one and the name of the mc is monkey d luo chen or uchiha jiang xi 🤣 i will dropped that shit in less than 1 second.

ACHILLES
ACHILLESLv4

the comment was also passive aggresive

THIZZGATOR:why would you leave such a passive aggressive comment on a fairly tame review?
THIZZGATOR
THIZZGATORLv4

you've got no idea what passive aggressive is.

ACHILLES:the comment was also passive aggresive
ACHILLES
ACHILLESLv4

neither do you then it seems😂😂👍

THIZZGATOR:you've got no idea what passive aggressive is.
THIZZGATOR
THIZZGATORLv4

sure buddy whatever ya say.

ACHILLES:neither do you then it seems😂😂👍
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