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MrScroll
MrScrollLv55mth
2024-06-07 01:15

The novel starts off promisingly, introducing us to a protagonist who embarks on an epic journey, battling legendary creatures and ending up in Kanto, right by Professor Oak’s house. This premise, while not entirely original, had the potential to be engaging and exciting. However, the narrative takes a disappointing turn when the protagonist inexplicably gains mastery in multiple disciplines without any apparent effort or training. The author seems to have fast-forwarded through what could have been a compelling journey of growth and learning, instead opting to bestow these skills upon the character as if by magic. The protagonist’s time in the world is stated to be a year, but the development of his skills does not align with this timeline. It would have been more believable and satisfying if the author had shown the character’s progression through hard work and dedication, rather than simply stating that he had become a master. In conclusion, while the novel had an intriguing premise and a potentially interesting character, the lack of believable character development and the rushed narrative left me feeling unsatisfied. I believe the author missed an opportunity to delve deeper into the protagonist’s journey towards mastery, which could have added much-needed depth and realism to the story. Yes I used an AI

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