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Lordmoonlight
LordmoonlightLv1111mth
2024-05-24 11:09

It’s a good read just hate how he just deposits things like it’s nothing and any hope for 2 wife’s even when it’s a no harem fic

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AgentMonke
AgentMonkeAuthor

what do you mean deposit? Maybe I can fix that? I dont know what you're talking about tho!

Lordmoonlight
LordmoonlightLv11

It was just the metal stuff not really a big problem just found it weird that no one will say anything with after finding new metal and all that

AgentMonke:what do you mean deposit? Maybe I can fix that? I dont know what you're talking about tho!
AgentMonke
AgentMonkeAuthor

oh! They do find it but not often. The Steelix eat some of it most of the time

Lordmoonlight:It was just the metal stuff not really a big problem just found it weird that no one will say anything with after finding new metal and all that
Lordmoonlight
LordmoonlightLv11

I saw that later on Can’t say I don’t love it keep up the good work

AgentMonke:oh! They do find it but not often. The Steelix eat some of it most of the time
Lordmoonlight
LordmoonlightLv11

My problem now is this a ash fic or something even as a teacher he’s doing too much

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