Only read if you’re bored, I read up to ch.12. Mc starts off stranded on an island at age 9, eats a zoan devil fruit (ghidorah version), and somehow easily awakens all 3 aspects of haki and also awakens his fruit before he’s 15. Whitebeard and Big Mom land on his island and they instantly fight after tiny dialogue, meets Xebec and gets roped into joining the crew. Also the mc doesn’t remember his name just because, (No explanation for that) and then Xebec gives him a name. Word count is too low per chapter, grammar is barely average, paragraphs are thick blocks of text. Author doesn’t differentiate between talking and thinking, characters are super bland, every interaction between people is so basic it hurts to read. Ex: (Whitebeard looks at me funny. “Let’s fight gurarara” laughing just because.) There is so little context and the mc just looks dumb trying to fight whitebeard, big mom, sengoku, etc at the beginning chapters.

The story is really well written, a great start so far and enjoyable... there's just one major flaw that I recommend that the author fixes. The paragraphs are really long, making it straining for the eyes and hard to read. there are unnecessarily long paragraphs that are like a running text that flows without end. When I started out writing fanfics, that was the first error I committed that I had to learn to fix, and if you the author can correct this, you'll have very popular stories in the future based on what you've written so far. Yes, I did write this review in one long paragraph, running text, to make a point. below, I'll write the exact thing I did do far, but with smaller paragraphs as an example. ------- The story is really well written, a great start so far and enjoyable... There's just one major flaw that I recommend that the author fixes. The paragraphs are really long, making it straining for the eyes, and hard to read. There are unnecessarily long paragraphs, that are like a running text that flows without end. When I started out writing fanfics, that was the first error I committed that I had to learn to fix, and if you the author can correct this, you'll have very popular stories in the future based on what you've written so far. This should have been much easier to read and understand, hopefully, you got my point. 3.9/5 and if you correct the paragraphs, It'll be a 4.3/5.

Interesting novel so far with good grammar and spelling. I like that you didn’t choose Marco and made your own character as whitebeards vice captain

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it's pretty good, but the story development have more to be desired

hey atuhor if you decide to rewrite or reboot this story, you might want to consider more world building such as how does he got the haki,skills etc and more into immersion of the story the idea is good but needs polishing because right now it feels so jumpy. suddenly he can fight zephyr and then rayleigh so yeaa overall its good to read when you want to relax but as the story progresses i find myself questioning about his battle powers u know ehehe good luck author keep up

Not my cup of coffee but maybe u guys might like it Try reading for 5-10 chapters

When was this written? There is a lot of inconsistency, Marco wasn't in Whitebeard's cew at the time of God Valley, he was 4/5 years old. And in the novel not mentioned stussy, gloriosa and captain john in rocks crew. I also didn't like the fact that the MC wanted to be an NPC. His mentality doesn't make sense that he has King's Haki, he clearly doesn't have what it takes.

LET. HIM. COOOOOOK amazing fanfic idea

Just happened to come across this one and I have to say that this was an amazing read so far. Great writing, highly recommended to give it a read.