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2024-06-02 23:06

I don't know I feel like it's pretty good. I feel like you're missing some details slow down in some areas there and there like what happened to Gail's son did he die I feel like something's Irish.I do like extra details of slime diary I should not be a question I should be scattered in all in the chapters you know a few people opinions there anymore . will building to understand how people feel and the characters think. what's going on in the world we have the progress is in the town in the world

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All right, proper review now that I am up to chap 61. The first ten chaps are somewhat rushed, with the first four being the worst in terms of pacing. After which, the pacing stabilizes. Quality? Pretty good, I would say. I admit that I use Gpt to help me edit from time to time, and in the first few chaps it was really noticable. But after the first ten-ish chaps is when I get an actually good prompt for it so that if I end up using it for editing it doesn't make the story robotic. I don't always use it, but when I do, it's not too in your face. (I hope) For cases when Gpt is used, it is purely to edit the already written text. I don't use it to write out paragraphs. What's the point in writing then? It's still predominantly my own writing, and I avoid using it whenever possible. However, it does help to fix up paragraphs and organize the structure slightly Story Development? Pretty good, while it follows the rails of the original story, I beleive I do enough changes to make the story my own. And post Walpurgis, it will mostly, if not completely abandon the rails of the original. Using the world to further the story. Character design? Pretty happy with how it turned out too. Shuna was a tad rushed, but then I work on her and expand on her character. Same for most of the relevant characters. I feel like I did a relatively good job on developing them. World background? I mean, it's tensura. But yes, I am being pretty careful not to break the world and follow the rules already laid out world while writing. Mistakes happen here and there, but for the most part I try to keep stuff as good as it can be. Now, onto the prophet stuff. A lot of people didn't like it. That's fine. Not for you. While not a major plot point post Orc disaster, it still shows up from time to time. And it is somewhat relevant to events that will happen in the future.

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