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EveStar_OriginLv1210mth
2024-06-02 19:51

The story by itself was good. and the simulations and whatnot is engaging. but somehow author was bad in executing and incorporating the modern element, the dungeon, and the cultivation. as a person who live in world with dungeon (even though he was indeed transmigrated) he don't even know how others players promote from bronze to silver and so on until several simulations. even if as cultivator he does not need to do this, he should not be that clueless right? and despite being modern world with all technological advantage, when he went to scripture pavilion, why on earth he need to memorize? he could just use video/image recording. even if there's restriction, they should have some props to record. and even if nothing can be taken out of said dungeon beside memories, he could always ask his master or the library elders to imprint the knowledge needed directly to the brain (like 3 occassion where they just point to his forehead and he gains said skill). i mean the identity is there. plus, even if he can't take anything out, since he can touch everything in that cultivation dungeon, this mean he can actually consume pills. it is a plothole. but author somehow didn't notice it. and for god's sake, he is a college student, not some high school underage boy. why does author shied away to talk about seggs and relationship? mc always act coy and avoid it with. lastly he never take his interpersonal relationship with others seriously and only used them. he didn't even care about what happen to them. a tragedy could be avoided if he just took notice in the simulation and prevent it in real life and yet he didn't even feel anything after learning the knews the friend's (gf in the simulation) parents died.

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just to add. essentially the mc himself didn't do anything in the story. he was a shut in, refinding alchemy every day, when out on lunch date every weekend, and watch (mind you not play but watch) text simulation every week and suddenly he gotten stronger. the engaging part was the simulation. it was portrayed he was someone who does great things in the simulation. while technically, it was just the system who simulated his future based on current world situation and his decision. like playing games and time skipping development in annual interval. so the plot had not even progressed even after a year he got the system. yet somehow su xing was under the impression he was a savior meant to change the blue star's fated demise.

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EveStar_OriginLv12

haha be warn that as the you reaching 200 mark, you would need a bit of patience. you'll notice the irksome and annoyance of having an mc like su xing. but on the bright side, the story inside the simulation was great imo.

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