grammar: 3 stars. spaces in weird places, typos, mistakes, sudden switches from past tense to present tense and whatnot. use grammarly or something. plot: 2 stars. the logic fails it. even a simple "bullied guy becomes strong" origin story is falling apart because... a bullied guy snaps, and because of that, goes on a walk? what is this, a rimworld moment? characters: 2 stars. The lack of plot logic seeps into characters. and the system is annoying. does it HAVE to insult the MC, whom the readers project themselves on? and MC himself. he wants to be stronger, but we only know that coz that's what he wants from the system. why he wants to be stronger? what are his problems? world: 3 stars. painfully average on the base level, with some things that are just... badly explained. like superpowers, or systems, which are apparently common????
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