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2024-05-17 10:07

good fanfic brotheman .................

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I really like this story, but I’m going to give a purely critical opinion after more than 200 chapters. To start, I’ll be direct: if you can’t stand a character’s name changing several times in the same chapter, or that the Beyonders' powers are not similar to those in the original work (completely nerfed—for example, SPOILER, at one point the MC gets attacked by a sequence 7 witch, who is completely stupid even though sequence 8 enhances intelligence and scheming skills, takes a fatal blow but doesn’t use mirror substitution, which I remind you is a very important ability for witches and what makes them particularly annoying, like a magician’s paper figures, and doesn’t use any curses... etc. This isn’t the only case), if you also can’t stand that the MC’s power system isn’t well written and even seems neglected (he advances to sequence 6, and so far, there’s no information on the upgrades and powers he’s gained—though maybe this will be explained later, but I don’t have much hope given the number of flaws in this story. There’s no improvement of lower sequences upon advancing, a pathetic digestion method even though the MC is supposed to know how it really works, and not just follow the potion’s name... etc. And there are other flaws, but there are too many for me to remember them all), or that there are missing chapters because the author or editor doesn’t care—well, don’t read this, you’ll lose your mind (like me, but I’m already invested and have nothing else to read). But it does have its good points. It’s one of the rare LotM fanfics with romance, slow but interesting and not rushed, which I like. A story that is, for the most part, logical, and if you can overlook the flaws, it’s easily in the top LotM fanfics. The MC doesn’t care too much about keeping the plot on its original course, which I like, as I find an MC who worries too much about the original plot and does everything to keep it on track to be stupid and pathetic. I really feel that what’s preventing it from being in the top are mainly the writing and the Beyonders' power system. The rest is secondary in my opinion. In short, I recommend it only if you have thick skin and some patience, otherwise, go for something of better quality.

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