Interesting story concept, but some immaturity in writing technique that disturbs the flow for the reader. From switching between 1st and 3rd person perspective every paragraph or so, to restricted vocabulary and/or repetitive word use (eg nearly very sentence in a paragraph starting with or exclusively using the pronoun, ‘she’). For me, this many grammatical issues in the opening chapters has me dropping the book and leaving a cautionary review for those readers who find these kinds of consistent flaws to be off putting too.
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