it clearly needs more character development and the plot is reverting to your same old style. it is also so 2013. your story design and romantic ventures are good for bit style play, but completely fails from the propective of story-side novel view. I used to like your stories very much but now I find them going through the same old cliques. girls falling for the fake bravado act of protags and protags screwing friends gf's by some hypocritical moral superiority. and most importantly haircuts does change a person's look but not his personality and others perspective( one of your main cliques, it does help a persons own self-esteem though). also stop trying to make the protag a pariah when he is some loser who got lucky by getting a system and feels like he is losing out by getting a girlfriend. I mean it is harem story but try to develop each character's story so that they won't feel like empty text.
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LIKEI_Love_Hina:you should go to see his discord. He sometimes replies after some time
JoyousRebellion:Nah I don't believe he will ever change his style. I was there when he wrote start by becoming a mangaka years ago and he has not changed at all, his protags have been becoming more scummy i think. They be having internal monologues justifying their actions with some shity reasoningimage