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DetachedDreamer
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The story is alright but the R.O.B. stuff goes on for 4 chapters and you just hope the God will shut up as soon as possible but he doesn't. the author tries to inject emotional situations into the story but they are horrbily forced, from the no-option, option about his family to Yamamoto and his adopted son; comes out of no where, no build up, and in scenarios they don't fit. Grammar isn't great. lots of missing words or unfinished sentences. spacing errors. if you get past all that there is an intriguing plot and characters that havent been applied in this manner. it has potential if the authors writing gets better but at this point its just average.

Naruto: The Hima clan

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Daoist8uleLZ
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id like to say that so far 26 chapters and its getting better

The_Legit_Writer
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Thanks for the review i'll be sure to improve my writing