This is a Good story for what I have read. The story does move along at a slow pace which is not necessarily bad. The characters were introduced in a way that you would be able to get a picture of who they were and they had some good dynamics. This is the strong point. But I do need to address some of the Grammar as there is some I have to note. First of all, when you are writing for the dialogue you should stick to a tense for the characters. It can get confusing if you say ' Here is what happened, I went to the front and then I would slap them'(Just an example). It does not sound right so I do believe that this is an area which needs improvement as it can be seen many times. There are others that could be stylized better to incorporate a better Dialogue narrative as with some improvements, the dialogue could be amazing. Overall though, the Story dominates as it holds up the interest in the chapters and if you are willing to look past the mistakes you still have a story which can draw you in with well -rounded characters and nice world.
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I hope you visit again soon! I promise to finish the book and intense scenes in future updates! Thanks for reviewing and for the detailed feedback.
